This week I was assigned to write about A Time Where You: I chose the topic A Time Where I Most Felt Alive and wrote a poem. After reading it to many people, I was advised to share it with the world. Leave a comment and tell me what you think. Also, if you know what experience I'm talking about. Enjoy.
A Time Where I Felt Most Alive
Could one simple move
Suddenly remove
Or maybe a sudden lift
My body now just a drift
When it looks so easy
All anyone can do is get queasy
The journey of it all
Is a dance between greatness and a foul ball
Hearing going
The clock slowing
No hurry
Just the worries
While you know the feeling
Others are in debt to the ceiling
As the coins leave her purse
You can see them converse
Arms and legs spread out
For a bird would not fly without
Spinning in the air
The feeling of despair
A simple single of the hand
A smile takes the stand
A once in a lifetime chance
Watching at first glance
The experience is what waits
But the tunnel is what creates
Defying gravity is such a simple task
When you have four 250 horsepower fans waiting for someone to ask
So take a dive
For this is when you'll feel most alive
Ahhh this is good! Except a little advice, the line where you say "Or is it just… Oh no… Someone’s getting queasy" doesn't really fit with the rest of the poem. The tone is different. THANK GOD YOU FINALLY POSTED.
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Nice! But you just it since you read it to me. I liked the other ending better.
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